Thursday, February 15, 2007

prose-ery thursday

i should feel light, but i feel heavy. heavier. heavy with regret.
regret of words said. regret of secrets told. of memories skewered
and memories sold. of a life line now not so much mine to unfold.

of loss of control.

i've handed over the reins. they are no longer mine. the
distinction between offering and advantage became too
blurry of a line. i have slid out from underneath your thumb.


(the prompt was prose. my mood was dark.)

8 comments:

twilightspider said...

"i have slid out from underneath your thumb"

Such a strong closer. I hope that your mood will lighten the longer you are out from beneath that thumb.

ecm said...

i LOVED your last line

i have slid out from underneath your thumb

perfect

Regina Clare Jane said...

I totally agree- the last line says it all. Such a great line- I want to remember it...

strauss said...

I agree the last line really tied up your mood and told the story. Enjoyable to read...hope you are feeling less dark ;)

gautami tripathy said...

The laat line truely does it. Loved that.


gautami
Ambrosial.

daisies said...

that last line is spectacular ... ahhh, the dark days of february ...

soon we will have green sprouts beauty :)

this is amazing hon, simply amazing!

la vie en rose said...

ouch! that last line really packs a punch...

Crafty Green Poet said...

You have really used sound and rhythm so well in this piece. it's almost hypnotic. Lovely.